A poem

Bloomfield · Post by **Bloomfield** » Mon Oct 02, 2006 6:11 pm

I never thought
by Bloomfield

I never thought
I'd use the word
taffeta in poetry

Oops

OnlyAnEgg · Post by **OnlyAnEgg** » Mon Oct 02, 2006 6:30 pm

Taffeta, darling!
Taffeta, sweetheart...

SteveShaw · Post by **SteveShaw** » Mon Oct 02, 2006 6:42 pm

Forgive me Bloomfield, but I'm not entirely clear at this juncture as to whether "Oops" is part of the poem or not. Clearly, my lack of cultural refinement is showing through here in an all-too-raw way.

Bloomfield · Post by **Bloomfield** » Mon Oct 02, 2006 6:45 pm

SteveShaw wrote:Forgive me Bloomfield, but I'm not entirely clear at this juncture as to whether "Oops" is part of the poem or not. Clearly, my lack of cultural refinement is showing through here in an all-too-raw way.

You will understand, of course, that as a poet I cannot normaly stoop to explain art to those beyond whom it clearly is, but since you are a poor devil with neither arms nor legs, I will make an exception: Oops is part of the poem. And a very fine part, too, if I do say so myself.

jim stone · Post by **jim stone** » Mon Oct 02, 2006 6:47 pm

Bloomfield wrote:I never thought
by Bloomfield

I never thought
I'd use the word
taffeta in poetry

Oops

Not to worry....

gonzo914 · Post by **gonzo914** » Mon Oct 02, 2006 6:52 pm

It lacks the power and slap-you-in-the-face angst of his earlier works. And I don't mean earlier in his life or earlier in his writing career; I mean earlier today.

scottielvr · Post by **scottielvr** » Mon Oct 02, 2006 6:54 pm

Bloomfield wrote: I never thought

Oops

The trouble with poets these days is that they can't be bothered with editing. They just natter on and on, word after frivolous word. Pare away some of the frills, and you might be on to something. See?

Bloomfield · Post by **Bloomfield** » Mon Oct 02, 2006 7:00 pm

Fie! The chill breath of small minds gnaws my artistic soul. My work is fated for a later, finer age.

dubhlinn · Post by **dubhlinn** » Mon Oct 02, 2006 7:12 pm

Bloomfield wrote:Fie! The chill breath of small minds gnaws my artistic soul. My work is fated for a later, finer age.

Like Cave paintings... there for eons and then one day..Art.

Way to go Bro..

Slan,
D.

emmline · Post by **emmline** » Mon Oct 02, 2006 7:25 pm

scottielvr wrote:
Bloomfield wrote: I never thought

Oops
The trouble with poets these days is that they can't be bothered with editing. They just natter on and on, word after frivolous word. Pare away some of the frills, and you might be on to something. See?

Thanks Scottie, ever so much. Thanks to your deft editing, I now have a poem of my very own:

A poem:

I'd use the word
taffeta in poetry.

scottielvr · Post by **scottielvr** » Mon Oct 02, 2006 7:32 pm

Nice poem. Scans well. But you misspelled "daft."

Walden · Post by **Walden** » Mon Oct 02, 2006 7:42 pm

Taffeta, taffeta, oh what a textile,
I could wear taffeta even in exile!
It surely beats muslin and broad polyester,
But doesn't beat gauze, when you've got a jolly fester.

emmline · Post by **emmline** » Mon Oct 02, 2006 7:45 pm

Walden wrote:Taffeta, taffeta, oh what a textile,
I could wear taffeta even in exile!
It surely beats muslin and broad polyester,
But doesn't beat gauze, when you've got a jolly fester.

(he doesn't look so jolly to me. otherwise Walden, brilliant, just brilliant.
btw, did you ever think you would use the word taffeta in poetry?)

djm · Post by **djm** » Mon Oct 02, 2006 8:02 pm

Man, I just hate to see old topics re-run through the mill again and again. Not to blow my own horn or anything, but I am well known for my use of taffeta in both prose and rhyme:

Taffeta
Taffeta
Taffeta
Linoleum

Taffeta
Taffeta
Taffeta
Marmalade

Taffeta
Taffeta
Taffeta
Aluminium

djm

FJohnSharp · Post by **FJohnSharp** » Mon Oct 02, 2006 10:18 pm

Bloom, dude, you're only one syllable away from a haiku.

Assuming 'poetry' is three syllables.

Which I do.

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