Double Dactyls

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Double Dactyls

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Ok, we've done haiku to death. Here's a real challenge.

I here quote from an online chat conducted today by Washington Post columnist Gene Weingarten, a personal hero of mine:
A double dactyl is two quatrains containing a single rhyme, that being the final sound of each quatrain. With the exceptions of the final, rhyming lines, the entire poem must be in paired dactyls, each dactyl being one stressed syllable followed by two unstressed. The rhyming lines must have four and only four downbeats. Line breaks can be idiosyncratic.

Thus, you get two quatrains exactly like this:

DUM-dum-dum DUM-dum-dum
DUM-dum-dum DUM-dum-dum
DUM-dum-dum DUM-dum-dum
DUM-dum-dum DAH

In addition, the first line of the poem must be gibberish, and one line and only one line in the poem must be a dactylic six-syllable word. Generally the second line is a person's name, though variations are permitted.

Got it? Very demanding, waaay more so than a limerick. Very childish. Rather exciting, when you nail one.

The most famous double dactyl is probably this one, by John Hollander:

Higgledy piggledy
Benjamin Harrison
Twenty-third president
Was, and as such,

Served between Clevelands and,
Save for this trivial
Idiosyncrasy
Didn't do much.
Note: although GW simply says the first line of the poem need only be "gibberish," I have yet to see one of these begin with something other than "higgledy piggledy," and this in fact is another name for the form.

My first attempt (which is admittedly pretty lame) is about the business trip I'm going on tomorrow:
Higgledy piggledy
Box-playing wage slave Ro3b
Goes to a meeting that
Frankly just sucks.

With resignation, he
Sits in a conference room
Digito-femurally
Playing the Bucks.
I'm sure you lot can do better.
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A pair o' pterodactyls
To Mt. Ida took flight
To dare a pair o' dactyls
To join them in a fight.
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Pickety pockety
Poor Nanohedron makes
Hash of a lame double
Dactyloid verse.

Misapprehendingly,
First he had thought 'twas a
Cojoinèd dinosaur.
Which one is worse?
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Higgledy Piggledy
Lambchop's a frisky one
Dance in her pasture and
Celebrate spring.

Find her a fiddle and
Bow, and then glory in
Anthropomorphism!
She'll play a fling!
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Scoobity Doobity
I prefer "Nerd", because
Dorks are more socially
out of their depth

gallus domesticus
Must fear the Geeks since they,
Capitanivorous,
cause chicken death
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Higgledy piggledy
"Call out your grievances!"
Angela Johnson did
painfully sigh.

"Pointing of fingers and
killing of neighbors, while
unsatisfactory,
surely apply!"

(I have no idea what that means, I was just sort of trying out the form. Let's try another that isn't nonsense.)

Higgledy piggledy
Cranky Aunt Judith, while
swinging her horsewhip, did
grimace and moan:

"Children are innately
harmful, destructive. I'll
incontrovertibly
never one own."

Yay! :lol:
oh Lana Turner we love you get up
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Jumpin’ Gethsemane
Once as a young boy I
Prayed for a bike but I
Never got one.

Then in a vision Our
Savior came unto me.
“Just steal that bike; I’ll
Forgive you, my son.”

Image
Crazy for the blue white and red
Crazy for the blue white and red
And yellow fringe
Crazy for the blue white red and yellow
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Walden wrote:A pair o' pterodactyls
To Mt. Ida took flight
To dare a pair o' dactyls
To join them in a fight.
I love these little Walden snippets. They remind me a lot of Walt Kelly. Perhaps Walden should resurrect Pogo.
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Image

Next you'll be telling me He died for our Schwinns.
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Nanohedron wrote:Image

Next you'll be telling me He died for our Schwinns.
That is so unredeemably terrible that I wish I had said it.

(But to paraphrase Mr. Whistler talking to Mr. Wilde -- "Don't worry, gonzo, you probably will.")
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Post by Denny »

gonzo914 wrote:
Nanohedron wrote: Next you'll be telling me He died for our Schwinns.
That is so unredeemably terrible that I wish I had said it.

(But to paraphrase Mr. Whistler talking to Mr. Wilde -- "Don't worry, gonzo, you probably will.")
Im sure that many of us do...and will. :D
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Schmackadoo Rumblekins!
What do you get if you
Cross a grey Elephant
with Kangaroos?

Pachydermology
says that this creature is
nothing that any
Australian could lose!
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Flummox and Balderdash!
Davy Spillane is an
Excellent Dude whom the
CHIFF has maligned!

I have no DOUBT that his
Whistle at LEAST would be
Ultramelodically
Uber-designed!



(editing...forgot to make the last words rhyme...revising...revising...)
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Hickory dickory,
Scottie is such a nerd;
she has a weakness for
doggerel dares.

This won’t be clever, though.
More likely tedious.
Sesquipedalian.
Nobody cares.


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Post by Walden »

I don't know... I just find it difficult writing in a waltz rhythm.
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